I cannot find my maxalt so I wrote. What then do you make of this poem?

You have a few grammatical faux pas here: 'torture ensueS' (though the rhyme is understandably not as pure); 'its fire' because 'it's' is used only as a contraction for 'it is' not as a possessive pronoun. You could use a few commas here and there as well, although you have evoked rather well the world of the night terror. Incidentally, nightmares is a single word, not two as you have written. I know all of this attention to minutiae seems a bit priggish and , but I know you and you expect a lot of yourself (which is reasonable because you have a great deal to offer), including getting things exactly right. Forgive me my honesty...